vangoghz said: well idk what else is in your paper, but maybe add in why its real like “the tension in contrasting imagery make it real by…” and then elaborate on what it is, like instead of saying “it” say “This scene” etc. hopefully that helps? idk
yes actually i put the actual sentence below in the post so you could see the phrases’ context, but that does make sense and i explained why afterwards its more like a topic sentence to start of the paragraph and tell your readers what you’re talking about and she wants better language rather than saying “it seems real” which is really boring and 4th grade. This is what i ended up with, im not sure if its grammatically correct? (and thank you!)
"The chemistry between Degraw’s Creon and Kennedy’s Antigone is so authentic it ceases reality and causes the audience to forget they are witnessing a performance"